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Is post-graduation depression real?


While not having a formal diagnosis, the term is used to describe the feeling of sadness and loss some graduates experience following commencement. University provides an inveterate structure for students and once it’s stripped away and they are forced into the ‘real world,’ life becomes uncertain. Life that lacks mandatory classes, strict schedules, lunch during class gaps with friends and an abundance of anxiety and depression. Social media also contributes to post-graduation depression, as it is filled with stories of success from people in academia, celebrities, and public figures. These posts lead to toxic comparisons, anxiety, and jealousy which eliminates the likeliness of asking for help.

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- Arlynda Gregory
- Chantel Brown
- Carrie Rubalacava

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  1. greg borchardFebruary 18, 2018 at 12:11 PM

    Okay ... a few notes to get you steered in the right direction. First, check the homework instructions distributed in class (due Wednesday).

    What you have described here looks more like a science report than a news story. You'll need to rethink your approach here based on what other news stories you can find on the subject.

    The links you've provided so far look like they provide general information on the subject, but to write a news story, you'll need to find a timely, local issue that counts as news ... again, we don't want an essay or science project here ... something the reader will find newsy based on a story that has had an effect on someone else.

    Check out the instructions for posting links in the homework material. We want active hyperlinks with a description of the page for the reader, and the links should have an author, headline, and publication associated with them.

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  2. greg borchardFebruary 25, 2018 at 9:02 AM

    Looks like you have a different story in mind now ... good ... fine. This one will likely work a lot better.

    For now, tune up your sentence constructions so you use active verbs. You use almost entirely passive verbs in your sentences right now, and they read slowly. Identify your subject first -- it belongs early in your sentence. Then follow it with a verb that actually does something (avoid "is," "are," "was," "were," etc.) The reader will follow your writing more clearly this way.

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